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stupot07

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Bottle of 500ml water at the Ricoh is £2, so given its londong prices £2.10 ain't that bad ;)
 

Esoterica

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It can't have been that good a day, you were coherent enough to write all that and post it before 10.30pm on a Saturday :p
 

mrtrench

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Really hard to read tbh

Constructive, friendly comment: Really love that 87mint has written the review and committed to write a blog for the entire season. However the style of the review reads like Russell Brand and nameless 1970s NME reviewer's lovechild trying to get in extra long words and metaphors. You're clearly a bright guy but really bright people dismiss showboating for simple effective prose. Still love that you are doing this.
 

shmmeee

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Found it overly wordy and a bit try hard, and comes off quite muddled and hard to read. Most of the funny asides weren't funny and could've been cut to make it a more sensible length.

Other than that: fair play for giving it a go and posting it up here.
 

87mint

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Fair enough. Appreciate the fb. Editing obviously required - but sorry I think swearing is q appropriate for Millwall away. Thanks for reading.
 
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Huckerby

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Constructive, friendly comment: Really love that 87mint has written the review and committed to write a blog for the entire season. However the style of the review reads like Russell Brand and nameless 1970s NME reviewer's lovechild trying to get in extra long words and metaphors. You're clearly a bright guy but really bright people dismiss showboating for simple effective prose. Still love that you are doing this.
That's what I meant. Apologies if I came across unfriendly. Was rushing to get the comment in I was on the move

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Harry Krishner

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I really appreciate the attempt at a write-up. I used to look forward to those !just got back" posts thst nobody seems to do anymore that include observations on the place, fights, stewards, no of SBA etc., as I can't always get to games myself.

If 87mint is considering becoming a professional wordsmith, he/she may do well to limit the rambling prose, but it's also a fair assumption that he spent much of the day in pubs and is therefore pissed, so I forgive him.
 

mrtrench

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I for one enjoy listening to Russell Brand

Really? I think he's a complete knob. He tries to paper over the lack of a well-thought through argument by mistakenly thinking that using long words means he is intelligent. It's a smoke screen - look at what he actually says: he makes statements he doesn't back up or supports with illogical points. This is Brand I'm talking about, not Mint.
 

Houchens Head

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Honest opinion? I read the first two paragraphs and got totally bored with it. Far too many metaphors etc. Also have to agree about the swearing. Blogs are read by young kids. I really don't want my young grandkids reading this. They can read the report in the Telegraph, without the bad language. ;)
 

Houchens Head

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Really? I think he's a complete knob. He tries to paper over the lack of a well-thought through argument by mistakenly thinking that using long words means he is intelligent. It's a smoke screen - look at what he actually says: he makes statements he doesn't back up or supports with illogical points. This is Brand I'm talking about, not Mint.

Totally agree MrTrench! What exactly is Russell Blands profession anyway? He sure as hell ain't no comedian! Unfunniest bloke ever!
 

mrtrench

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Honest opinion? I read the first two paragraphs and got totally bored with it. Far too many metaphors etc. Also have to agree about the swearing. Blogs are read by young kids. I really don't want my young grandkids reading this. They can read the report in the Telegraph, without the bad language. ;)

I feel obliged to retract what I've said a little now, as the report isn't that bad (not criticising you Houch). I think it's really just the structure that needs a little work, which is hardly surprising given that it appeared so quickly. It's not far from being really good.
 

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